The Pizza Box

2013-07-07 840 0 1 Rating: 3.0

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Our Entry into the 48 hr GFC from last year. Want to do better this year. Our genre was cardboard and we chose to show the dreams of a child mellow in middle age and return in our later years.

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michaelduck Said: 2013-07-08 21:07:23
Rating: 3

Title: Well Done with tough subject

Pros: I thought the way you shot this was very well done. The various camera angles on the child were very nice and flowed quite well. I also liked the color of the shots. If you used some color correction, nice job. If not, you got very lucky and keep color correction in your mind for next time. Your attention to detail was noted. Example being that you actually showed a shuttle lifting off on the TV as the little girl starting speaking of the rocket ship. I love seeing that type of detail. I was extremely impress with the child. She did very well.

Cons: This one is hard to critique the story as the subject you were given made story extremely difficult. You did well with what you had. I did not think the middle age woman portion went as smoothly as the others. It was hard to tell what she was doing. I would not have known if it were not for your description of the film. She did not seem to pay attention to the news or think about the various dreams as a child. She seemed to at the very beginning of her scene as she looked at the box, but not much more from there. The acting of the final woman was also not as well done as the others.

Other Thoughts: Overall, I think you did a good job with the subject you had and think you could really shine with a better one. Nice job and keep up the good work.

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